The Author’s Complex Relationship with Her Characters

The comments section of the erotic story was filled with passionate opinions from readers. Some praised the author’s ability to weave a complex and engaging tale, while others criticized the writing style and grammar.

moooow2 wrote, “good story!”

ItsNormy chimed in, “Fantastic story…Love the characters, the action, the change of direction, BUT I hope by now you have learned to spell masturbation…every time you use the word, my ride hits a hole in the road….thank you…”

Anonymous reader shared their thoughts, “I am just waiting for the chapter about the Threesome: Jen, Beth and the author. This is the only way to to resolve Jeffs conflict. Maybe Rennie could help the trio out. She can make it a foursome? Sounds like fun to me.”

Anonymous reader continued, “I really enjoyed the stories. They have the confusion and complexities of life as messy and real as it is. The characters are usually pretty believable.

“I just wish you had a proof reader,” they added. “For those of us who know the difference between ‘your’ and ‘you’re’ it is jarring and takes us out of the magic of the moment to realize that this talented author couldn’t possibly be the articulate successful and well-educated character in the story. Jeff would certainly know that plurals don’t take apostrophes and possessives do.

Anonymous reader concluded, “Other than that little nitpicking I commend you as a talented story teller.”

Anonymous reader commented, “I’m enjoying the story out there exciting and sensitive art the same time!!!!!!

Anonymous reader shared their thoughts, “Tamil”

Anonymous reader wrote, “this last chapter is almost word for word exactly the same as as the first section,,, make up something new please

Anonymous reader continued, “It’s still a great story. Don’t worry about these little things that other people are mentioning about your writing. I can still understand what you meant to say. Please keep writing. But when are you going to tell Jen about Beth? I would love to see you and Jen end up together.”

Anonymous reader commented, “Great story, but u did fuck up with the names between jen and beth, before he was talking to his in law about jen u called her beth.”

Anonymous reader shared their thoughts, “Jeff and Lance should get together XD

All jokes aside, great story!”

Anonymous reader continued, “The story is good. You spell masturbate wrong. Would like for him to end up with both women.”

Anonymous reader commented, “You lost me on this story. By making the story about Beth you painted yourself into a corner. It makes it hard to drop here as a lead character. It also foretells how the story will end.”

Anonymous reader shared their thoughts, “have Jen dump Jeff for Rainee .”

Anonymous reader commented, “I hope there is more to come.”

Anonymous reader wrote, “hehehhehehehehehehehehe”

Anonymous reader continued, “Good story. Have Jeff and Jen get married to each other and have many children. I later on Jen is comfortable with Jeff fucking Beth then let this happen and get Beth pregnant too.”

Anonymous reader commented, “Great Story! Just continue to tell the ‘true story’. Those are always the best.”

Anonymous reader shared their thoughts, “this is an amazing story i find the way u put the detail in with out to much phisical detail makes it so much better”

Anonymous reader wrote, “Great story, looking forward to the next installment.”

Anonymous reader continued, “Personally, I’d fuck them both. Jen would be open to it. She already went for the pussy licking with Raine. She’d do it with Beth, too. I say fuck the family. Beth’s husband did plenty of fucking around on her, which is what brought Beth to Jeff in the first place. Now Beth’s had Jeff and wants him to keep fucking her so she’ll agree to a threesome with Jen to have him. Besides… Jen works a lot and Beth can fill in for her. They’ll share and trust each other.”

Anonymous reader commented, “Beth had him and blew it. She’s just another dumb bitch who talked herself out of a winner.

“I fuck my sister-in-law but only because she’s a thousand percent better fuck than my wife,” they added. “I told my wife that I’m fucking her and that if she didn’t like it to move out. She didn’t believe me so I called her sister and had her come over. I took them both in the bedroom and fucked her sister in front of her. Carol was cumming all over me and the bed while my wife sat there and cried. I told her to get undressed and I’d fuck her too or just shut the fuck up but that Carol is moving in with us. She got undressed. I fucked her a little while and then went back to fucking Carol. It took a couple of months but my wife learned a few things from watching us. The 1st time I made her suck my cum out of Carol’s pussy, she balked but then she got into it and made Carol cum in her mouth. Then I had Carol suck my wife’s pussy while my wife sucked my cock and that was the 1st best blow job she ever gave me.”

Anonymous reader commented, “I sense a threesome approaching 😉

Anonymous reader wrote, “Guys this is a true story he can’t change it :/”

Anonymous reader continued, “Jen > Beth…. simple

Anonymous reader commented, “We want Jen!….We want Jen!…….”

Anonymous reader wrote, “I’ll be pissed if Jeff dumps Jen for Beth>=[

Anonymous reader continued, “Very good story keep it”

As the comments poured in, the author was flooded with praise and constructive criticism. Readers raved about the story, calling it “awesome” and “exciting” with “sensitive art.” They eagerly awaited the next chapter, with some even suggesting a dramatic twist – a threesome between Jeff, Beth, and the author.

“I am just waiting for the chapter about the Threesome: Jen, Beth and the author,” one reader wrote. “This is the only way to resolve Jeff’s conflict. Maybe Rennie could help the trio out. She can make it a foursome? Sounds like fun to me.” Another reader chimed in, “I really enjoyed the stories. They have the confusion and complexities of life as messy and real as it is. The characters are usually pretty believable.” However, they also pointed out a few grammatical errors, suggesting that the author could benefit from a proofreader.

“I just wish you had a proof reader,” the reader wrote. “For those of us who know the difference between ‘your’ and ‘you’re,’ it is jarring and takes us out of the magic of the moment to realize that this talented author couldn’t possibly be the articulate, successful, and well-educated character in the story. Jeff would certainly know that plurals don’t take apostrophes and possessives do.” Despite these criticisms, the reader concluded, “Other than that little nitpicking, I commend you as a talented storyteller.”

Another reader praised the author’s ability to balance excitement and sensitivity. “I’m enjoying the story, it’s exciting and sensitive at the same time!!!!!” they wrote.

One reader even made a humorous comment about the author’s writing style. “Fantastic story… Love the characters, the action, the change of direction, BUT I hope by now you have learned to spell masturbation… every time you use the word, my ride hits a hole in the road…. thank you,” they wrote with a laugh.